WHAT DO YOU THINK OF THIS SONG?

[Locomotive16]

i dont care not really an issue so mind ur business

[Robbie]

i dont care not really an issue so mind ur business

how about being banned?

[Locomotive16]

never got banned so i ainr doin sumthing wrong so piss off

[Robbie]

moved  :\

why did people even respond to this?

[Locomotive16]

ok computer freak go fuck ur self k?
atleast im not a a guy speding his life on the pc..
and probably a better muscian thN UY BY MILES

[Robbie]

the net can be harsh sometimes huni  

[Kov]

Come in come right in
dont hesitate come right in
im the one with your wildest dreams
im the one who can set you free

Hello city speaking
i wont rip you off
come right in

All ill do is play you n toy with you you
until your paranoid bipolar n crazy
Come to me a person come out a
paranoid andorid Aw!,

ill take you through a world youve never ben
ill break you into peace until your but a sin
ill help you admit nobody dies a virgin because life screws all and your first in line honey yea!

Breakdown your on your knees
your sinking in my seas

Aw..!

kinda like GNR, VR, Black Sabbath, and Douglas Adams put into a mixer, shaken up well, and served cold.  

Not bad, if it has cool riffs to go with it

[High'N'Dry]

Pretty good song dude
although u shopuld extend it

[w.a.r.'swife]

ill help you admit nobody dies a virgin because life screws all and your first in line honey yea!

Breakdown your on your knees
your sinking in my seas

Aw..!

those are good lines but the rest is a rough draft

[clarablue]

       Keep writing and don't care much about what others might
think.With all the respect for everyone,it is so easy for some people
to say:"oh this is not good or you could change this or that..." but
why don't they start creating something? Sometimes,even brilliant
minds have some loss of inspiration.So keep being yourself and expressing
your ideas by writing.Much respect,peace.

[locomotive]

well its great that you are trying but my first impression?
It was painful to read...didn't flow, the first half was better than the second half for sure though..Reads like a shitty ripoff of "Welcome to the jungle"......just being honest..lol..