Poem- 'Nameless'

[axlstwin]

The End was over and in it there was nothing.
The sun had streamed aflame into the black and bruising emptiness.
And the moon had cracked like the shell of a snail.
The sky just vanished.
The flies all saw it coming and they didnt even care.
The vultures tried to warn all the people they could find.
But the people pinned their eye-pods shut.
And theyd all long since burnt out their ears.
In the thickets of the lost wood, the owls mourned the rats.
And most of the children got caught in the spiders web.
The trees could no longer hold up the air
Jesus had almost half a heart left when he prayed.
Then with a splinter and a bleeding stone he tried to light a Bush.
Mother Earth felt like a migraine and her soil throbbed, her soil throbbed.
All the rivers withered up and died.
Humanity spat out blood into the faces of its neighbours.
And the last thing to fade out was a small frozen teardrop on the face of a dead baby.

---the end---

well?

[nemo]

But the people pinned their eye-pods shut.
And theyd all long since burnt out their ears.

And most of the children got caught in the spiders web.
The trees could no longer hold up the air



well?

I absolutely love those lines, especially "And they'd all long since burned out their ears"

dunno why, but they just read really well, I like that whole juxtaposition of senses thing

[Rock Diva]

The End was over and in it there was nothing.
The sun had streamed aflame into the black and bruising emptiness.
And the moon had cracked like the shell of a snail.
The sky just vanished.
The flies all saw it coming and they didnt even care.
The vultures tried to warn all the people they could find.
But the people pinned their eye-pods shut.
And theyd all long since burnt out their ears.
In the thickets of the lost wood, the owls mourned the rats.
And most of the children got caught in the spiders web.
The trees could no longer hold up the air
Jesus had almost half a heart left when he prayed.
Then with a splinter and a bleeding stone he tried to light a Bush.
Mother Earth felt like a migraine and her soil throbbed, her soil throbbed.
All the rivers withered up and died.
Humanity spat out blood into the faces of its neighbours.
And the last thing to fade out was a small frozen teardrop on the face of a dead baby.

That is really special. I want to read more of your writing. Keep being exceptional, you star.

[axlstwin]

That is really special. I want to read more of your writing. Keep being exceptional, you star.

haha...cheers. I used a lengthened, adapted version of that one for a piece of coursework the other day, haven't got it back yet though...however, my English teacher loves me so I doubt I'll get a bad mark.

Unfortunately though, her acclaim of my talents have now extended to the point where she's gonna be setting me harder work... harder work than the general GCSE syllabus or something. Dunno what THAT will be like.

[nemo]

Unfortunately though, her acclaim of my talents have now extended to the point where she's gonna be setting me harder work... harder work than the general GCSE syllabus or something. Dunno what THAT will be like.

It'll be good for you, if you can work to a standard that you pass that stuff, you'll walk the GCSE and it'll be great preperation for your A-Level too, one off my teachers did a similar thing with me doing my Standard Grades (Scottish GSCE equivalent) and getting me to try some of the Higher (A-Level) coursework and it really made everything a lot easier for me in the long run

[Rock Diva]

I used a lengthened, adapted version of that one for a piece of coursework the other day, haven't got it back yet though...however, my English teacher loves me so I doubt I'll get a bad mark.

I want to read it. And everybody loves you, how can they not ?

Have you read anything by Clark Ashton Smith ?

[axlstwin]

I want to read it. And everybody loves you, how can they not ?

Have you read anything by Clark Ashton Smith ?

I've not I'm afraid. Should I make it a point to do so?

It'll be good for you, if you can work to a standard that you pass that stuff, you'll walk the GCSE and it'll be great preperation for your A-Level too, one off my teachers did a similar thing with me doing my Standard Grades (Scottish GSCE equivalent) and getting me to try some of the Higher (A-Level) coursework and it really made everything a lot easier for me in the long run

It didn't get too complicated, juggling both the Standard Grade and Higher work, as well as all the other subjects? I really need to push up all my science grades, or I'm gonna fail them all.

[Rock Diva]

Should I make it a point to do so?

I'll find out.

[axlstwin]

I'll find out.

http://www.eldritchdark.com/


this might be your helping hand ^


I like the little I've skimmed through  

[Rock Diva]

He was one of Lovecraft's close friends, he was more famous at the time for being a sculptor and artist and his writing was never really recognised. I saved some of his books in my Amazon wishlist.

[axlstwin]

He was one of Lovecraft's close friends, he was more famous at the time for being a sculptor and artist and his writing was never really recognised. I saved some of his books in my Amazon wishlist.

That link I gave has all of his collected works: poems, stories, art and all

[White-Rider]

BEAUTIFUL!!!   ... the baby will be alive, though ...

[Melrose]

I'm stunned...

I love poetry and one of my favourite poems is by Byron... its called When we two Parted... but anyway...

I read your poem and it truly touched me... I'd love to read more of your work... I know it can be difficult to put your stuff on show in the public eye... hey Im a model I know all about exposing my ass lol... but a thread of your stuff would be much appreciated

[gnr-4-ever]

Nice lyrics.